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Self portrait (Please read description) by Dogezon Self portrait (Please read description) by Dogezon
This is, quite literally, the first human I have drawn in well over two years. Even back then I was naff' and only managed side on views. So any advice, any, would be welcomed as - as you can most likely tell - I'm a complete and utter novice when it comes to humans.

Oh, the portrait is based off of the top left picture in this deviation: [link]

For this picture I used: 5H, 3H, HB, B graphite pencils. My blending sticks, some kitchen paper, and my putty eraser.
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Critique by *SaturnSunset 43 minutes, 13s ago
Hmmmm
Maybe try making the chin slightly shorter and mouth too, in the photo back of hat goes further back than in your drawing! The upper lip comes in towards the nose in humans and the nose should be slightly longer! the eye furthest from the hand should be lower and have barely any white! it is good considering how long you have not drawn a human for! I like the ear and the hand and the blazer, they are good!!! My favourite though is definitely the hand! just practice and it will improve for you!
keep it up
(sorry if i was slightly harsh)
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I will give you a tough criticism on this piece if that is what you want. To give my honest opinion. The rating was based on reasons. Doge please be serious to this because this might help you a lot.

Base upon this human portray, I've compare this to the real one and if I'm just talking about the outlook, they obviously have had a big difference while comparing. However it wasn't really that big because its actually stretched vertically. That also means you draw things that extended their height. That appears to be the problem on the position when you draw. If I guess, you are 90 degree with papers and your sight. This is very important that you protect your back. However While you are looking at the paper, the angle was actually changed and in many case it flattened your sight. and sight is so important in Visual art that can influence your drawing. This is an example. From this, it proves that its very important to keep checking the perpective (Just perspective) by holding up the paper and look at it. Try it next time and don't be lazy, a look can let you detect problems and correct them immidiately before the whole drawing getting any worse.

The other problem came from the size of everything in this picture. The most obvious mistake that was shown here is the size of the eye and nose. I looked at your photo and realize that your eyes are about 2 times smaller than your nose. But then you draw them out and the size is almost the same. That appears to be a visual problem on proportion (just proportion) Proportion to be honest is the most frustrating thing in the world, 1 slightly mistake can make everything looks crazily weird or abnormal. That is a fact and I think I would rather leave that reason for your own good (I knew it, I don't want to tell you want, for your own good) There are many ways to improve proportioning, but the way I most recommend is to use visual element and the things you see beside as another proportion when applying a size to an object. Which basically means : drawing the eye, use the size of the mouth as the main size, if the mouth is bigger than the eyes for about 2 times, then draw the eyes 2 times smaller. This is a skill call applying in visual terms, if I remember.

The last problem is about the shading. First of all, Shading can be very hard, but a slightly contrast can make the whole entire picture look perfect. Not kidding. Shading is to identify the lighting and how lose the object was observed. I looked back to the photo and realize that the biggest problem in this picture is the shading. When shading doesn't make sense, it will end up confusing people about the positions it appears to be. For example, by looking at the photo, the hand should be the lightest part because its the nearest. However the shading of the hand has combined with the shading on the shirt behind, kind of giving us a feeling that the hand is connected to the shirt. We all know that this is totally not going to happen. So what I can recommend about shading is to go with it. Contrast is so important and that will defines areas and perspective at the same time. Seeing a place that have dark shade, crash that graphie pencil to make a dark line. Especially the shadows. its important to have courage while drawing. So not just we need courages to try new things, art also apply courages.

I'm not sure if this is true, but it made me feel that you use paper towels to smugg a lot, or your finger. Smugging is not a bad technique to use, but using too much can cause an opposite effect. Because smugging make the shading smooth. Either too smooth or too sketchy is not good looking. Trust me with this one. If you want examples, email me.

Overall if I need to be honest with you, this piece is actually a big step for you. From pony to human is a crazy move for instance. If you manage to get something like that, you got some talent. But make sure while dealing with cartoons and realism they both have a different technique applied to them.

Before I go, I recommend you to try with basic shading like a ball. Shading a ball can be damn hard I have to tell you that first of all. Maybe it looks stupid, but never misjudge art. A Ball is actually very hard to shade if you learn the best way of shading.

Keep up the good work and I recommend if you really want to do shading, its very important to start from basics~
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BombPrincess Featured By Owner Nov 26, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
I feel like you have some good critiques already provided, but one thing I would add (if it has not already been mentioned) is that you should really start off with learning how to draw with a grid. It's not a fix-all, but it will help you get started with mastering perspective and proportions.
Keep up the work, and you will progress :la:
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Dogezon Featured By Owner Nov 29, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
Danke! :3
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xYarks Featured By Owner Nov 26, 2012  Student Digital Artist
Aiee, all you need to do is to do more with perspective training and go hard with those graphie pencils~
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BlackNapalmPony Featured By Owner Nov 25, 2012  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
Hmmm... Idea... XD
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Dogezon Featured By Owner Nov 26, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
Idea?
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BlackNapalmPony Featured By Owner Nov 26, 2012  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
Maybe I could try something like this. It won't be easy, and I'm STILL
looking for an artistic challenge!
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Dogezon Featured By Owner Nov 29, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
DO ET
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BlackNapalmPony Featured By Owner Nov 30, 2012  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
I will when I have some free time.

I have four commissions to do ;w;
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HurleyBoss Featured By Owner Nov 25, 2012
I think it's really good. When I tried to do a self portrait I ended up looking Asian :D
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